Ch2 03
See? It’s not only Hasera that thinks that this guy is all that and a bag of potato chips! Even the level-headed and incredibly normal Lu fangirls over the man, the legend, The Lark.
Spekaing of fangirling, here’s another…
Hasera and Lark Review:
White Noise
Lark:
White Noise tells the story of a kid named Wren. He’s from some kind of closed-off village from after the world ended from ‘Aliens’. Wren’s got two things going for him: An imaginary big-eyed dog-like friend named Winter and the fact that he’s got a tail. Poor kid must have been Cursed at birth by the Winter-thing. They both have the same kind of tails, so obviously there’s some connection there.
The story for this one is told in parts. The beginning starts in the middle and later on, those parts that happened before are filled in. Not too shabby and pretty well timed, if you ask me, and you are, because you’re reading this and I’m amazing. The characters react in believable ways and it is very easy to get into the story and follow along.
If I were to give White Noise a downside, it would be that the author is holding a lot close to their chest. The plane itself looks interesting and the fallout of whatever nuclear is would have been interesting to see in more than one panel, but overall, it’s a well polished, well presented piece of work.
The art starts off strong and gets stronger. While there are some issues with body sizes and perspective, they are minor at most and don’t really break the reader away from engaging with the story and the characters. As the story progresses, you can see the artist improving their craft and working more and more on refining their style – a style that was already great to begin with.
If I were to recommend White Noise to someone, it would be all those kids back in Guardian School The Academy. They seem the right age to get into the whole ‘teenager in trouble’ angle and are wide-eyed enough that they would get caught up in the mystery of everything that’s going on.
It certainly is worth checking out if you’re into well drawn characters and interesting story lines.
Hasera:
EEEEEEEEE! Wren is the most adorable Cursed I have ever seen! The tail just ads to his cute factor! So, this story takes place in another Plane, this time, some kind of future-technology driven one where something called ‘Aliens’ blew everything to hell, but some neutrals survived, while others, apparently, got cursed!
The story follows a teenager named Wren who is trying to outrun some bad guys who want him dead because that’s their job. I mean, who just does a job because they’re told to? There has to be a want to do it, you know? Anyhow! The one thing that’s certain is that Wren is dangerous and that maybe the people who are hunting him should just leave him alone so he and Anna can be together! for their own safety!
I was fawning over the art in later pages and I was loving the art at the beginning, so I’m not entirely sure how to grade it – Good goes to Great? Grood? I don’t know. It’s nice, the flow of action and the intermingling of story and perspective works well.
I’d recommend this story to anyone with a pulse, and without (Yes, even the Unclaimed). There’s something for everyone: Romance, fighting, love, shipping possibilities, mystery, shy cute boys, Anna… Just go and read it already while I write my fanfic of Anna and Wren! get back to work.
Sheesh – Let the girl finish before you deliver the not-rehearsed-at-all commiseration routine, Lu!
Interesting that the ice thing apparently had some precedent. Seems that Hasera might not be so great at healing magic because her healing talents lie elsewhere, and that’s why her binding ritual was so different…
…As I kinda predicted with 1:25. 😛
Good. Good. More predictions are wanted! Little hints like that are the lifeblood of my story telling! What other things have you noticed? 😀
THAT FACE. I almost heard the *gasp* sound of Lu in my head. XD
Wooo! XD Lu has a crushing hug!
But unlike the elf, Lu didn’t actually just say, “Gasp!”
It’s an elven thing. No. Really. It is. Elves literally say the word Gasp! in this world when they can’t believe something or are shocked. They are so snooty that they do not allow themselves to express their emotions in such rudimentary ways!
Bunch of pointy-eared snobs.
@MonicaNG: Same here! That panel is priceless lol
Just a random visitor, I read a bunch of stories. I’ll make a note to check back when you build up more of a buffer. It looks like you update Monday and Thursday is that plan? Be nice if that were listed someplace on the page. Also minor doubled word “The the” in the beginning of “The Order of the Nine:” on the About page. As a suggestion, read your dialog and info texts out loud…as in audibly. The slower reading pace and needing to actually pronounce the words will help you catch wordo’s before they make it into public copy.
Enjoy!
Speaking of reading things out loud: Check out just below the Header picture where the words: My Hero! are… I think you may have missed something as well 😀 We’ll probably have to make that text larger. It would seem as though many people haven’t picked up on it.
Make it move across the page, while blinking and in insane pink color, then maybe people will notice. 😀
But seriously it kind of looks like a subtitle now and people usually skip through that or read it once and then forget it existed. Anyway I think that people will ask about it anyway, because why look around the page and search for it when you can ask in a comment and maybe someone will reply. I usually check dates in the archives. -_-‘
We’ll make it bigger, or slanted or something. Maybe just take a big ol’ rubber stamp font and slam it over the entire header?
Hey did you have anything to do with Out of My Element, the style seems similar
Yes we used to make OoME, we put it on hiatus because we needed to rework a lot of things and will reboot it when My Hero! is completed =)